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The day you signed the recruitment forms
You said you felt like you'd sold your soul.

But you cried the night before basics
So I knew it was still in there

But somewhere in the marching
And the running and the shouting,
The gunshots and the dust and blood—

Somewhere

It was lost.

You were lost.

Show me the contract
And I'll sign away my soul

Because we used to say we'd brave hell together
If it meant we'd never be apart

And I won't risk heaven
If you might not be waiting
I choose this.

"All because of you, I believe in angels. Not the kind with wings, no not the kind with halos. The kind that bring you home when home becomes a strange place. I'll follow your voice. All you have to do is shout it out,"
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Saskia-Mu Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011
your writing always gives me chills down my spine and up to my hair because its so... i'm wordless.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011
Thanks :heart:
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Saskia-Mu Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011
:)its taking me a while to get through all your poems - i'm sorry i'll get there soon!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011
Please take your time! They're not going anywhere, ya know ;)

It means a lot to me that you'd take the time to read through all of my poems. It's quite an endeavor ^^

:huggle:
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Saskia-Mu Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
:) well you're poems are something special and i really, i dont think like or enjoy is really the right word but, is i have said MANY times before, they're powerful and they make me feel that perhaps some of your power may seep in to me, although that sounds weird and rather selfish.... thank you for writing them, they mean so much to me and im sure everyone else who reads them!

but dont worry i'll grab my plith hat and set out on this endevorous quest with full spirit!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
I have to say, your comment really made my day. I'm so happy that my writing makes you feel strong. I love that, actually, and it's not selfish at all :tighthug:
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Saskia-Mu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
Oh good! i had a bit of trouble deciding if i wanted to post it or not and in the end figured i might as well because its always nice to know that your helping someone right from the horses mouth :) so i'm very glad i did! and even more glad that i made your day ^-^
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
:heart: ^^
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pre-heresyKharn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
i know this conversation..
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011
At the time, it was terribly romantic. Now it's a bit romantically terrible :shrug:
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pre-heresyKharn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
it tends to do that. still, it's rare nowadays finding people that'll say this and actually mean it.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011
I still mean it. I think she still means it too in her way.
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pre-heresyKharn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
:huggle:
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DizzyTestament Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010
I like your quote. It seems a great driving force to this poem.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010
Thanks :huggle:
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Crystal-Moon-Beam Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
Just..... beautiful. :huggle:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010
Thank you very much :huggle:
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Crystal-Moon-Beam Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010
no worries
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rovert13 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful...and thought provoking....and heart wrenching...and a lot of other things that I just don't have the words to describe....
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010
Thank you :blushes:
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rovert13 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
The compliment is well deserved ^_^
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TheLastJinx Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
funny how the poetry you write can touch everyone. and funny how i'm not laughing. this is beautiful. thank you. i understand this in ways that no person should have to be able to understand. but i think i'm just babbling. again, thank you. and whenever you feel lonely, know that you are not alone.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010
Thank you very much :huggle:

And you're not babbling. I wish you didn't have to understand it as well as you do, and I hope you find happiness again.
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Gum-nutChild Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Lovely!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
Thanks :huggle:
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Thinkrational Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
I really love this poem. Simple and to the point. So many friends in this position...sooo many.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thank you very much. I'm sorry to hear that about your friends, though ><'
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doorfromheaven Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
This is incredible... the flow is perfect. Never once did it feel awkward or felt like the moment had been compromised. the word choice and spacing made it powerful and one that sticks with me. Tragic and sweet all at the same time.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thanks! I had a little bit of trouble with the wording at points, but it's good to hear that it came out well :huggle:
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starsinmydreams Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
WOW. Amazing is an understatement. I love the title btw.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thanks :huggle:

I actually fixated on that titled before I'd written the poem.
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Laskuraska Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
I was already going to hell. I like to pretend he did this so he could come with me.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
I know the feeling :huggle:
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Laskuraska Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
:hug:
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xXoKayTee Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful. n 3n
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thanks :huggle:
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Masqeh Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010
Amazing. This holds a special meaning to me.
No doubt my all time favorite.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
I'm so glad to hear that you like it, although, in this case, I wish you couldn't relate quite so well, if you know what I mean :huggle:
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Masqeh Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Yeah I know what you mean. :sniff:
But nonetheless, I find comfort in great works such as this one.
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shayzard Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010
"And I won't risk heaven
If you might not be waiting"

So beyond beautiful.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thanks very much :huggle:
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Shadebreeze Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010
I'd love to post something meaningful, but I honestly can't think of any way to describe how beautiful your writing is. Bravo.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
But it was very sweet of you to leave a post, anyway. Thanks :huggle:
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RedFeatherEagle Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Saaaaameee. D:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Aw, that's all right ^^

Thanks :huggle:
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RedFeatherEagle Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:3 Huzzah, it all worked out in the end.
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saccharin-affliction Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010   Writer
You tell beautiful stories with your poems. Don't ever stop writing. Not for us, but for you.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
I won't. Thank you :huggle:
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rookiez-cookiez Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
love it
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Thanks :hug:
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