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There's a heady exhilaration blooming in my chest and a broad, triumphant smile on my lips and I know I look almost too happy, but I can't control my beaming, and I am absolutely bursting to tell you the news:

That my essay was perfect, that I nailed the presentation, that the biochem final was a walk in the park.

And, oh, God, I want to tell you so many things and that I love you and that I want you and I want to feel your arms around me, just barely containing my wild excitement. I want to laugh with relief and feel your lips curve up in a smile against the skin of my neck.

And I love you,
I love you,
I love you.

It's these moments when I am absolutely on top of the world that I want to share with you. I want you to laugh and tease me and call me a nerdy little bookworm and your baby girl and then kiss me all over so that I am pulled in a thousand directions at once. I want to absolutely unwind in your arms, but you hold me so tightly that I'm never afraid of falling apart.

And, oh--

Oh.

Sometimes I forget that you're gone.

My chest, only moments ago so light and full, grows heavy as lead, and my throat closes up, and oh, God, don't cry. Not here. Not now.

I am alone in my room when I finally let go. With my face in my hands and my back against the door, it is like you've only been gone a few minutes, like I could open the door and see your retreating back. Like I could chase after you.

Beg you.

Please.

Please don't go.

I only want to tell you.

Oh, God, just to tell you.

That I…

I--
Sometimes all I want to do is tell you how much I still love you.
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velocity07 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011
painful. yet oh so beautiful. i felt my chest heave with the narrator's. heard a voice inside my head saying, "if only, if only..."

there are too many 'if only's' in this world, and this piece captured the worst one for a child.

brilliant. absolutely brilliant. :heart:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011
Thank you very much <3
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velocity07 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011
You're very welcome. :3
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner May 31, 2011
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our Pick of the Day. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
Oh my goodness! Thank you very much <3

I'm honored ^^
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KtheCard Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Student Writer
This is fantastic! I lovelove how it begins on a light note and slowly becomes anguished, like you were intending at first to write something joyful, but you couldn't keep the sorrow away. Does that make sense? I love that.
Also, the little stanza where you put emphasis on each word of the sentence; wonderful. It's awesome how emphasizing one word can change the impact of an entire phrase.
Gosh, this is so beautiful.
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insertAWESOMENESS Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
So beautiful and sad .... I love the way the mood changes so drastically smack dab in the middle. Amazing, as usual!
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CoalButterflies Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
:cling: Somedays the world doesn't like us.
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sonandheir Featured By Owner May 15, 2011
This is amazing
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Blue-Angel-X Featured By Owner May 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
*wipes the tear away* you made me cry (T_T)
its beautiful :)
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