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I cried for you today.

It was a piece of music. A beautiful piece with a French name, all graceful curves and longing. I was in love with it immediately, just the way I was in love with you.

The truth is that I don't listen to music much anymore.

I don't sing.

I used to.

But the words hurt a little too much, now.

There were no words this time. Just a piano and a thousand memories tumbling along with these bittersweet notes that made my chest tighten and ache.

The memories seem like a lifetime ago. The girl in them smiles and laughs. She's so carefree. She looks like the girl in the photographs in my room, the one I don't quite recognize. She hasn't been hurt yet, that girl. She hasn't been in love.

She doesn't know.

I want to tell her to move slowly. Savor each moment and every kiss. Memorize the feel of your hand and the way you breathe when you sleep. Remember how you smiled at her, the way it lit up your whole face, especially your eyes. She knows why she loves you when you smile like that. She knows that nothing makes her feel so complete as knowing that that smile is just for her.

But you leave her. You leave her with a promise and she cries for you every day. She sings for you, too. Every song that we loved. She sings them and she doesn't feel quite so lonely. You promised her, you see. You promised that you'd come back, that you'd never say you didn't love her. And she believes you.

You never actually break that last promise. You never say the four words that might set her free. And I—

I can't.

I can't let you go.

The girl in my memory cries. But she makes herself stop after a while, because she knows that tears won't bring you back. And then she stops singing. She can't sing you home. She knows that, too.

You're gone and she's left with old photographs and a mirror that reflects a stranger.

I recognize her, though.

I cried for you today.

But maybe I cried for her, too.
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This is beautiful, made me sad.. considering situations I am in.. but also because you wrote it really well .good stuff :)
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Thank you! But I hope your situation improves. Hang in there :huggle:
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Averin-Renee Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Student
this is beautiful. and i know that song. tragic and beautiful
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
Thanks :thanks:
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girltoyou Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011  Student Photographer
You're an incredible writer... Why don't you mail the poems to her? This is clearly eating at you and even if she doesn't want to hear it, you should tell her. It'll be good for you to send them to her.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011
I don't have an address to send any of it too. Otherwise, trust me on this, I certainly would.
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girltoyou Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Student Photographer
if you don't mind my asking who is she? What's her name?
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011
She was my girlfriend. She got deployed overseas and she broke up with me because of it. I still love her more than anything :shrug:

Her name's in this poem if you're curious. It's an acrostic.
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girltoyou Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011  Student Photographer
So long as you know her first and last name, you can mail it to her. Tell the post ofice your mailing to troops and they'll get it to her. It may take a few months, but she'll get the mail.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011
That's a tempting option. I just don't know if it's the right thing to do. We've been broken up for some time now and if she's moving on... I mean, I don't want her to have moved on, but I don't want to hurt her by sending her letters, either.

I appreciate the advice, though. I'll keep it in mind.
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sonandheir Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011
"The truth is that I don't listen to music much anymore.

I don't sing.

I used to."

These lines break my heart
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011
Then if I ever start to sing again, I'll be sure to let you know :huggle:
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CoalButterflies Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011  Student Traditional Artist

I'm going to feature this.
Because I can't stop reading this; and the nostalgia is building up, and this is one of my favorite pieces of yours. You write so beautifully.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
Thank you very much! I'm honored ^^
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CoalButterflies Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Yann Tiersen is one of my favorite composers.
And before I looked at your Artist's Comment, I had a faint feeling it was the same piece.
Amelie, [link] the movie, had the entire soundtrack composed by Tiersen, and it's absolutely beautiful.
I know that would seem off-topic to a lot of people, but the rest of his music is breath-taking.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
I've seen the movie, actually, and you're right-- practically every piece is amazing. Plus the story's adorable ^^

Thanks for the link, though :heart:
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CoalButterflies Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I want to see it very much; I've read the synopsis, but there aren't any places around here that have it on rental. >.<
You're welcome. :love:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011
That's a pity ><'

Try Netflix or rent it from Amazon, maybe! It's worth seeing ^^
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LongLove Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011
This is a wonderful piece. I'm just wondering, are you talking about two people who were in love, but changed. Or people who were in love...and one died. Although you'll probably leave this for readers interpretation. I get the feeling it's both. Because, when the person you love changes...the person you thought they were, dies.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
Technically, the former explanation is the more accurate one. Nobody's dead, but you're right-- it certainly feels like one (or both) of us has died.

Anyway, thank you :thanks:
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LongLove Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
chur welcomes
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Draculasbride01 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
i cried as i read this... i cried for myself, i cried for those who were mentioned.... i know what it feels like now to cry tears that won't bring him back. it's a horrible feeling, and it still hurts... but i'm looking forward to the day that i no longer cry for him.

this is a beautiful peace, and it is incredibly moving. i love it so much... it has given me hope, hope for that one day.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010
Thank you very much :huggle:

I'm sorry that it made you cry, but I'm happy to hear that it gave you hope, too. That's important, I think-- having hope.
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Draculasbride01 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
noooo, don't be sorry! it was a very moving and inspirational piece... like i said, im still not at the point where i don't cry anymore, but you're absolutely right... having hope is super important!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010
:tighthug:
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StormTheParade Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Ohmyygod i love that piece. Comptine D'un Autre ete L'apres Midi ... i've actually learned to play it on the piano, i love it so much. Beautiful, isn't it?
So, uhm... Maybe I missed it, but ah... who is the girl you fell in love with? The "her" and "she" you keep mentioning... maybe i missed it?
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
I can see where this one might be a bit confusing ><'

I actually split myself (the narrator) into two people. There is "I" and there is "she." "I" is me in the present. "She" is the me from the past-- the girl in my memories. And the "you" that I'm addressing is the girl with whom I fell in love. With that in mind, I hope you can understand it. I'm sorry it was a little unclear ><'

And yes-- love that song. I wish I could play it on the piano. I'm quite jealous ;)
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cinnarabbit913 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
this gave me the chills.. O__O
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cinnarabbit913 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
okay that came out wrong. :D

what i meant was it was awesome and it made the hairs on the back of my neck stand.

okay that still came out wrong.

i don't know exactly how to phrase it but this piece has power :D
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Haha! :aww:

I understand you perfectly. Thank you :huggle:
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ElisabethAnna Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Absolutely lovely.. A perfect reflection of how I have been feeling
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010
:huggle:
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Rolfy Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010  Student General Artist
This is is truely beautiful.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Thank you :thanks:
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synchrogrl4295 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Student Writer
how did i know exactly what song you were referring to as soon as i read the first 2 sentences?
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Just lucky, I guess :aww:
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WrittenStar Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love that song.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
So do I. It's beautiful :aww:
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WrittenStar Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Anyways, I like what you wrote, which I meant to say in the first place.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010
Thanks ^^
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MellyMaltesers Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Student Interface Designer
aw
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
:huggle:
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DuchessaIbby Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010
Beautiful...It's so, real and felling provoking (if that makes sense) (:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
It makes perfect sense. Thank you :aww:
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Soulofthenight663 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, this poem is really deep but it also reminds me of something that happened to me recently heh, but anyway it's really deep, love it
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
I certainly hope that whatever happened to you gets better somehow :huggle:

Thanks.
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Soulofthenight663 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
:hug: Thx ^^
And np!
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Niccii--creative Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
wonderful piece and text (:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Thank you :aww:
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GreenEyedDream Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010  Student Filmographer
Beautiful.... I love how you split the principal character in two : now and then. Also, the pain and the sadness are so real. Yeah, beautiful.
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